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PostSubject: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 6:19 am

hehe i warn you, im a gothic poetry writer even though im semi normal in real life, i dont have any "real" mental issues, i just see better that i let out whatever im feeling through writing ;) enjoy? lol

First Dance Last Chance
All within me gone
but pain n' hope
hoping that the pain will fade away

you've made me what i am
Testing my patience and loyality to the limit

Everyone dies the same in the end
First chance to spill blood
First chance to regain my honor

MY mate was lost
my love is shattered
Vegence is the only thing I have left

You've rapped my rapped my home of its pride
you've killed the people
you let your family fall apart

look where you stand
its only a matter of time before.....
Death seperates us for good!

this is one for a girl we both absoultely hate over online no its no one here


Deepest Pains
Every single word comes from the deepest of pains

Ever single verse
composed from my misery

i've lost the man I love
All my inner hell has broken loose
someone save me from my misery

My crystal rose is shattered
My spririt crushed
Covered in both my enemies n' my own blood

Every single word comes from the deepest of pains

Ever single verse
composed from my misery
I wish I had One more Night to Live!

im not obliged to answer if i really did loose my boy ;) lol

Beautiful Corpse
Oh my sweet Trent kun
Share with me your greatest hours

I'm a poet who failed to write an ending to each and every one of her poems

A corpse bride
I'm all dead inside
MY heart may pump
But I head no beat

Heaven is but a ways
But come let us dance the moonlit hours away

Your final hour is coming
Please...
Let us be together i nthe next life

I'm dead to the world
Show me what it's like to have no shell
Bring my soul back to life

Forgive the Adoring Beast
Perhaps I have been hoping for so much then what could really happen
Maybe this is all just...
A dream?
This is my fav poem i have out of these three its soooo sweet

UPDATE
Song Fic for Kiss While Your Lips are Still Red
Come with me my love
Let’s run away to where no body can find us
The world is in our hands
No one can stop us
We’ll escape the wrath of the world
Bliss is certain.


Sweet little words made for silence
Not talk
Young heart for love
Not heartache
Dark hair for catching the wind
Not to veil the sight of a cold world


Pure love
Nothing more
Untainted and untouched
Young wolves running free through the moonlit woods
Forever uncaring from the cares of the world


Kiss while your lips are still red
While he`s still silent
Rest while bosom is still untouched, unveiled
Hold another hand while the hand`s still without a tool
Drown into eyes while they`re still blind
Love while the night still hides the withering dawn


Fresh snow falling from the grey sky
A constant reminder of the harsh world we live in my love
Burned into our memories forever
Our love will be ever lasting
Darling you know I’ll love you till the end of time
Uncaring for what others might think of us.


First day of love never comes back
A passionate hour`s never a wasted one
The violin, the poet`s hand,
Every thawing heart plays your theme with care


The taste of your sweet lips on my own
The rough past of yours or mine means nothing
We were meant for each other
Nothing can separate us
Forever free from the darkness of the world
The white rose shall be here forever
This I promise you…..


Kiss while your lips are still red
While he`s still silent
Rest while bosom is still untouched, unveiled
Hold another hand while the hand`s still without a tool
Drown into eyes while they`re still blind
Love while the night still hides the withering dawn

MY WRITING is in blue while THE SONGS LYRICS are in red. its somewhat of a story to go along with it...

Shattered Love
Would you mind if I hurt you?
Understand that I need to
Wish that I had other choices
Then to hurt the one I love

Your bitter sweet blood means nothing
No mercy no more
We’ve waited all this time
But now everything is lost

Blood has been spilled
You feel so cold
Your final breath shall be brought soon

I can feel you slipping away
The cage has been brought down
The darkness is creeping

Now you have only one minute in counting
Your precious heart is slowing
Yet your smiling face tells me it’s what you always wanted

It doesn’t mend this bitter mortal
The pain is still there
There’s no retreating
It’s over now
“What have you done now!”

i wrote this from a man's pov....he had to kill the woman he loves and is now deeply regretting it....
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 6:27 am

....my soul just died a little.


In a good way.
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 8:57 am

I like the last one the best too. :D
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 10:29 am

hehe =3 as i said, warning, much darkness in most of my poems, want me to post up more?
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 1:58 pm

Nice free-form. It's a bit disorderly, though. Maybe that's just your style, but for me it makes it hard to get a mental image of what you are expressing because it is difficult to follow.

Not to be critical. It's above par, but I think you could do better.


...hmm, now I'm debating whether or not to post one of mine.
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 2:27 pm

Your last poem inspired me:

Ode: to Richard

Oh, Dick-kun
desu
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 2:40 pm

lol im never really going for any specific order....besides....if we get down to the specificxs italien and shakespearen(im pretty sure thats it) i absolutely hate so ya....oh well....im sure i can find some more of my poems
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 2:44 pm

Love Song of the 21st Century: Be Quiet While I Wash Your Mouth

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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 2:46 pm

Please do. ^^

Actually, I think I'm going to post one of mine. I sort of feel like it right now:

The Wolf

I am the wolf,
And the Wolf am I,
Stalking through the deep forests of my mind,
Howling at the indifferent moon,
Scenting the air with long cruel nose,
Seeking the prey,
The meat I long for.

To come across a docile Doe,
To watch with malignant eyes
The movements of the fickle faun,
The young she-deer,
Grazing ignorant in the field,
Innocent to the feral mind,
The mind that bends it's will to her,
The carnal mind,
The Hunter's mind,
The mind that longs.

To fly across the gentle field,
Eyes mad with covetous glee,
To feast upon the she-deer's flesh,
To rip the throat of gentle Doe,
And spill her virgin blood upon my muzzle,
A sacrifice to primeval hunger,
The ancient longing.

I have partaken of venison,
Have seen the look in terrored eyes,
Have seen the fear and desire within,
As I rent her heart asunder,
And ripped her veins,
And watched her innocence bleed,
As her carcass heaved in contented sighs
Of passion and pain,
As she bleated, agonized in her ecstasy,
Longing for release.

I am the wolf,
And the Wolf am I,
Raging through the deep forests of my mind,
Howling at the indifferent moon,
Never again the flesh of she-deer,
Never again the fickle faun,
Never the taste of untouched youth,
Never will the blood on my muzzle flow,
A sacrifice to my dark desire,
Never again may the Doe I hunt,
For I have killed her,
In my longing.
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 2:50 pm

Protect: Her time of crisis

He penetrates the Wolf

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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Sun Apr 20, 2008 2:57 pm

nice wolf poem =3 now go to go hunting for some more....

EDIT

my first post got 2 more poems added to it Razz
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Mon Apr 21, 2008 2:51 pm

...Now I'm contemplating on posting my grisly poem here... >.>

I got 90% on it :D
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Mon Apr 21, 2008 4:32 pm

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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Mon Apr 21, 2008 4:34 pm

You sure? :D It's a 76-line poem...

Ah well, here goes...
Hooray for copypasting!



The price of Freedom

The dawn of defeat
The day of a death
Rides on the wings
Of a winter's breath

The demons arise
And whisper their lies
Claiming an eye for an eye
Yet only the conquered seem ever to die

The heavens weep
Over the bloodies keep
Broken spears and shattered swords
Slaughtered peasants, beheaded lords

They were a pack of wild dogs
Bloodied arms and stomping feet
Daring their foe to come out
To the field of battle where they'd meet

No resistance came and so
They roared in triumph and started to go
Every man wanted to be first
To murder and gore to slake their thirst

They know no compassion nor mercy nor love
Of everyone else, they are above
Selected to bear their grisly task
Oppressors under a gilded mask

Corrupted morals and twisted beliefs
Gleamed in the eyes of every soldier
Linked together in unwavering faith
As they charged on, shoulder to shoulder

They reject their humanity
And embrace insanity
As no man can know reality
They are of a single mentality

An adhesive poison oozes out
When they part their lips, without a doubt
Empty words and a charming smile
Fills zealots' heads with their seductive bile

The grasping tendrils and seductive charm
Of their beliefs and hatred's mire
All burned with the eternal fuel
Of a single, dark desire

Hordes of people flock to their cause
Despite the many obvious flaws
They become sheep for fear of resistance
Though prevailing requires only headstrong persistance

"The heretics must die!"
The army shouts with a roaring cry
The hills poured towards the wall
"Show them no mercy! Destroy them all!"

Burning, pillaging, looting
Down to the last of the pewter mugs
That was their great calling
The so called glory of this band of thugs

They rampaged through the streets unchecked
All that lied in their path was wrecked
Every single innocent's blood
Mingled with the watery mud

They moved relentlessy towards their goal
To one another did they extol
For eachother's careful aim
Like this was a simple game

They rounded all the leaders
And withe bestial grins and hungry eyes
Methodically started butchering them
Ignoring everyone else's desperate cries

The villagers refused to take up arms
Victims to those deadly charms
Remaining neutral to evade the army's ire
Ignoring the possibility of consequences dire

They left behind flames and smoke
The following morn with a misty cloak
The whole place was a bloody mess
Years of rebuilding required 'till success

Buds would grow anew
Years would pass along
'Till the dying wail
Of a summer song
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PostSubject: Re: my poems   Tue Apr 22, 2008 9:57 pm

Beautiful, Messiah.
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